its too fruityloopy

You used too much of the speech synth (especially sice you didnt make them say something new!)The other synths and their melodies were good though.

poorly made

In fruityloops, if you go under "misc" in the chanel settings there is a button that says "cut itself". That will clean up your melodies a lot, makeing the whole track more clear.

good

That really is your best yet